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Na portalu Litewskiego Zwi\u0105zku T\u0142umaczy Literatury <\/strong><\/span><\/p>\n

ukaza\u0142y si\u0119 przek\u0142ady <\/strong><\/span>wierszy Julii Hartwig i moich:<\/strong><\/p>\n

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http:\/\/www.llvs.lt\/?item=770&lang=lt&comments<\/a><\/p>\n

EKSPERT\u0116S I\u0160VADOS<\/span><\/strong><\/p>\n

Prad\u0117siu nuo statistikos. PL1 i\u0161vert\u0117 visus 3 pasi\u016blytus eil\u0117ra\u0161\u010dius, PL2 ir PL3 \u2013 po 1, t\u0105 pat\u012f, PL4 \u2013 1, bet kit\u0105 nei PL2 ir PL3. Visi keturi vert\u0117jai suvok\u0117 tekst\u0105 ir teisingai j\u012f perteik\u0117, tik padar\u0117 klaid\u0173, bet jos neesmin\u0117s ir lengvai pataisomos. Apskritai visi vertimai pakankamai geri, kad juos b\u016bt\u0173 galima aptarti.<\/p>\n

Marios Duszkos eil\u0117ra\u0161t\u012f \u201ePanie\u2026\u201c i\u0161vert\u0117 trys vert\u0117jai. PL1 pirm\u0105 eilut\u0119 (kartu ir pirm\u0105 \u017eod\u012f) i\u0161vert\u0117 \u201eDieve\u201c, PL2 ir PL3 \u2013 \u201eVie\u0161patie\u201c, o tai yra geriau, nes ar\u010diau originalo. Toliau visi trys vert\u0117jai pasirinko pa\u017eodi\u0161kesn\u012f variant\u0105 \u2013 \u201eneprivalai\u2026\u201c, bet labiau tinkamas \u2013 \u201enereikia\u201c, tai tiksliau pagal prasm\u0119 ir \u0161is veiksma\u017eodis nereikalauja dalyvin\u0117s konstrukcijos, pailginan\u010dios ir apsunkinan\u010dios kit\u0105 eilut\u0119 \u2013 \u201eg\u0105sdindamas ir bausdamas mus\u201c, \u201ebaugindamas ir bausdamas\u201c. Tre\u010di\u0105 eilut\u0119 teisingiausiai ir gra\u017eiausiai i\u0161vert\u0117 PL2 \u2013 \u201eatvesdinti \u012f DOROS keli\u0105\u201c. Galima ir atvesti, ir sugr\u0105\u017einti, bet \u012f doros keli\u0105, o ne \u012f teising\u0105 ar ger\u0105. \u012e \u0161ird\u012f galima \u201e\u012flieti\u201c (\u0161\u012f variant pasirinko PL3) daugiau meil\u0117s ar dar ko nors, o ne \u201e\u012fpilti\u201c. PL1 paskutinis ketureilis i\u0161\u0117jo pras\u010diausias \u2013 \u010dia ir nereikalinga inversija (\u201epripildyk tik\u201c), ir sunkiasvor\u0117 fraz\u0117 (\u201epripildyk tik m\u016bs\u0173 \u0161irdis kiek daugiau meil\u0117s\u201c), ir ne\u017einia kod\u0117l \u201eo\u201c vietoj \u201eir\u201c.<\/p>\n

J. Hatrwig eil\u0117ra\u0161t\u012f \u201eO tyla\u2026\u201c, sud\u0117tingiausi\u0105 i\u0161 trij\u0173 pasi\u016blyt\u0173j\u0173, i\u0161vert\u0117 tik PL1. Vertimas skamba gerai, padarytos tik kelios klaidel\u0117s: \u201ekaimo \u016bkis\u201c eil\u0117ra\u0161tyje skamba nekaip, ver\u010diau \u201ekaimo sodyba\u201c; v\u0117jelis ver\u010diau \u201e\u0161velniausias\u201c, o ne \u201elengviausias\u201c; paskutin\u0117je eilut\u0117je ver\u010diau vengti \u0161alutinio sakinio, kuris j\u0105 pailgina, ir laim\u0117 (d\u017eiaugsmas, baim\u0117 ar kita emocija) gali kilti \u201ei\u0161 nieko\u201c, o ne \u201ed\u0117l nieko\u201c.
\nPL1 ir PL4 i\u0161vert\u0117 J. Hartwig \u201ePrane\u0161im\u0105\u201c. PL1 vertimas yra geresnis, tik \u201ebetono veidas\u201c ne \u201emirtingas\u201c, o \u201enegyvas\u201c, auk\u0161tyn kyla ne \u201esien\u0173 kapas\u201c, o \u201esien\u0173 karstas\u201c (i\u0161kilusios sienos i\u0161ties pana\u0161esn\u0117s \u012f karst\u0105, o ne kap\u0105). Abu vert\u0117jai nesusidorojo su paskutine pirmo stulpelio eilute, beje, ir originaliame tekste skamban\u010dia ne itin gra\u017eiai. Abu vert\u0117jai i\u0161vert\u0117 pa\u017eod\u017eiui \u2013 \u201eir abejingi lang\u0173 \u012fsibrov\u0117liai spoksantys (\u017evelgiantys) langas \u012f lang\u0105\u201c. \u010cia buvo galima paie\u0161koti kitokios fraz\u0117s.<\/p>\n

Geriausiai \u012fvertin\u010diau PL1 vertimus \u2013 gerai i\u0161versti visi trys eil\u0117ra\u0161\u010diai, tre\u010diasis (\u201ePrane\u0161imas\u201c) i\u0161verstas geriau nei PL4.\u00a0Paskatin\u010diau PL4 \u2013 kad pasirinko versti ne pat\u012f lengviausi\u0105 eil\u0117ra\u0161t\u012f, kaip kad padar\u0117 PL2 ir PL3, ir i\u0161vert\u0117 j\u012f neblogai, nors ir pras\u010diau nei PL1.<\/p>\n

Irena Aleksait\u0117<\/p>\n

TEKSTAI ORIGINALO KALBA<\/span><\/strong><\/p>\n

MARIA DUSZKA (Freienwill, Biblioteka \u201eToposu\u201c, Sopot, 2012)<\/strong><\/p>\n

Panie
\nnie musisz nas
\nsprowadza\u0107 na dobr\u0105 drog\u0119
\nstrasz\u0105c i karz\u0105c nas
\ntrz\u0119sieniami ziemi
\npowodziami
\ntsunami<\/p>\n

wlej tylko
\nw nasze serca
\ntroch\u0119 wi\u0119cej mi\u0142o\u015bci
\na stworzymy na Ziemi raj<\/p>\n

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KONKURSO DALYVI\u0172 VERTIMAI<\/strong><\/span><\/p>\n

PL1
\nMaria Duszka (Freienwill, \u201eTopos\u201c biblioteka, Sopotas, 2012)<\/strong><\/p>\n

Dieve
\nneprivalai mus
\nsugr\u0105\u017einti \u012f teising\u0105 keli\u0105
\ng\u0105sdindamas ir bausdamas mus
\n\u017eem\u0117s dreb\u0117jimais
\ntvanais
\ncunamiais<\/p>\n

pripildyk tik
\nm\u016bs\u0173 \u0161irdis
\nkiek daugiau meil\u0117s
\no sukursime roj\u0173 \u017dem\u0117je<\/p>\n

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PL2
\nMaria Duszka (i\u0161 rinkinio Freinewill, Toposo biblioteka, Sopotas, 2012)<\/strong><\/p>\n

Vie\u0161patie
\nneprivalai m\u016bs\u0173
\natvesdinti \u012f doros keli\u0105
\nbaugindamas ir bausdamas mus
\n\u017eem\u0117s dreb\u0117jimais
\npotvyniais
\ncunamiais<\/p>\n

tik \u012fpilk
\ntruput\u012f daugiau
\nmeil\u0117s \u012f m\u016bs\u0173 \u0161irdis
\nir sukursime roj\u0173 \u017dem\u0117je<\/p>\n

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PL3
\nMaria Duszka<\/strong><\/p>\n

Vie\u0161patie
\nneprivalai m\u016bs\u0173
\natvesti \u012f ger\u0105 keli\u0105
\nbaugindamas ir bausdamas
\n\u017eem\u0117s dreb\u0117jimais
\npotvyniais
\ncunamiais<\/p>\n

\u012fliek tik
\n\u012f m\u016bs\u0173 \u0161ird\u012f
\ntruput\u012f daugiau meil\u0117s
\nir sukursime \u017dem\u0117je roj\u0173<\/p>\n

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